Overall my critique went very well. I got many good comments on how I was able to bring meaning to all my motions. Someone did suggest that at the end my reflected "REALITY" should be slightly lighter to allude to a reflection, which I thought was a great idea. My professor also suggested repeating some of my specialized elements, such as the underline that leads from "PROGRESSION" to "ILLUSION." If I add back in the clause about each choice leading to a new path ["to go to work, to stay home..."], I could most definitely use that there as well.
If I could do anything else different, given more time, I would apply that former comments of course, but I'd also want to make that reflected "REALITY" swing down, rather than fade in, & "ILLUSION" vanish in a puff of smoke, rather than zoom & fade. Additionally, I think I'd want to give my "general" transitions more meaning; right now they just kind of enter stage right & exit stage left (or vice versa...it's been a few years since my theatre days). Perhaps I could allude more to the technique of the actual opening, with the words coming in from the foreground & disappearing into the background. I think that really deepens the atmosphere. The only problem would be some of my effects work best on a "flat" atmosphere, but if I could learn to translate them into the 3D it would work wonders.
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